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It's the last term of primary school and I couldn’t wait for high school but there was one thing I had
to overcome before I went to highschool and that was school photos. I was the kid who would always
be sitting at the back of class, the one who is always dodging the objects when it comes to P.E. It was
5 minutes before the photos and I was fixing my hair up and cleaning myself. ‘Bob’ I walk over to the
m and they line me up everyone was here and so they counted down 3,2,1 cheese… to be continued
to overcome before I went to highschool and that was school photos. I was the kid who would always
be sitting at the back of class, the one who is always dodging the objects when it comes to P.E. It was
5 minutes before the photos and I was fixing my hair up and cleaning myself. ‘Bob’ I walk over to the
m and they line me up everyone was here and so they counted down 3,2,1 cheese… to be continued
Hi Simon,
ReplyDeleteI really liked this piece of writing about show not tell, you have done really well. I think this feeling is worried because Bob was fixing his hair and cleaning himself before the photos. Maybe next time you could add more show not tell e.g. I could feel sweat dripping off my face as I took a seat.
Other than that it was awesome, keep up the amazing work.
Siobhan.